Thursday, October 7, 2010

monster

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  1. You're a sick SOB! But in a good way! You should sell tickets for a ride around the inside of your head. It'd be the scariest ghost train ever. Top write, Chris.

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  2. This is v. cool and v. creepy, Chris. Great use of language to heighten the fear.
    Sean

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  3. No arm off bed! Easier to get dragged down that way. Nice.

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  4. Very scary and invented. Great pirce Chris

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  5. Thanks for the comments guys.

    I'd been holding onto this one for awhile, as it kind of disturbed me that I'd written it!

    But that's sort of how you know the writing is "working" - if you can affect yourself, it's a good start.

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  6. You captured the child's language and fear perfectly. His sweet attempt to be brave made it even more chilling. Bad ockapus - love that.

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  7. Thanks Lily.

    I've got a couple more of these short and nasty "Halloween Cards" that I'll be posting up here this month. I don't really know why I have so many stories of kids being terrified / causing havoc, but I do; purity of the emotions, perhaps?

    Glad you liked this one!

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  8. Excellent POV! Isn't that how our thoughts sound, no matter how old we are? : )

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